So i played the revision of my second piece in class and it went very well. I agree that a little tweaking could do it some good but over all i am happy with this composition.
Some of the comments
- Could be longer..... Because i am using a 5/8 time signature and placing eight note rests on random beats the piece does seem to have a feeling of timelessness. The listener looses track of the bar lines. In order to make this more effective the piece could have been longer and developed much more slowly. I have a lot of material that repeat's a lot.... It could potentially go on for longer and would still not seem boring.
- At measure 35 There is defiantly a point of highest tension. This is further than 60% of the way through the piece. I could rethink this. Maybe lengthen the material after or just have this happen a little before.
- The vibes have a repeating line that piano never plays. The material in both instruments is very different. This is not bad BUT I could incorporate some of that moving line in the piano
- Make use of the huge register that the piano has. I am sticking to the ledger lines for the most part. Maybe write in some double octaves.
That is All
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